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The Kavakian Empire – Part Two Emperor Ch9b

Posted in Sci-Fi Part 2, The Kavakian Empire with tags , , , , , , , , on September 26, 2015 by Dawn Ross

The Kavakian Empire

A Space Opera by Dawn Ross

Part Two – The Emperor

Chapter 9b

Note from the author: I am not a professional writer. I am an amateur who needs your help. If you’ve been following my sci-fi story, The Kavakian Empire, you may have been able to tell that I am having trouble developing many of my complimentary characters. Captain Robert Arden has been particularly difficult. This is another reason why previous chapters from his perspective are just basic outlines. The most interesting part about his previous chapter was the war conflict. But what about conflict of character? What else is there about Arden besides him being a captain? Except for the fact that he may be the one to save J.T., why do we care about what happens to him?

Knowing I have a weak character did not make this subchapter any easier to write. So after reading it, tell me your thoughts. And give me some ideas on how I can improve Captain Arden’s character in my novellas and make his part of the story more interesting.

“Captain Robert Arden of the Odyssey reporting to Vice Admiral Belmont,” Robert said to the vidcomm.

The admiral appeared on the screen. “Report.”

“Sir, the two Tredon ships have escaped over the border. The Defender and the Odyssey have sustained heavy damage.”

“Explain,” the admiral said tersely.

Robert explained.

“You should have waited until reinforcements arrived,” the admiral said with a hint of anger. Robert bristled inwardly. The admiral knew damned well from the report that they didn’t have any choice but to engage. No doubt Belmont would shift the blame of this part of the mission failure to Robert since his specific instructions were to only engage if he thought they had the upper hand.

“Our instructions were to intercept them,” Robert replied, trying to keep his tone from sounding as irritable as he felt. “Confrontation was inevitable.”

“And ineffective, it would seem,” the admiral said with a frown. “The Cronus and Poseidon should arrive at any moment. I’d like to tell you to chase the bastards down but the council is still sitting in debate.” He said the last word with a sour twist of his mouth.

“There must be another way we can get our crewmen back,” Robert said, hoping to force the admiral to think about other alternatives besides war.

“We have to get that laser back.”

Robert clenched his teeth. Only Vice Admiral Belmont would consider the mission more important than the human aspect.

“Repair your ships,” the admiral continued, “and prepare for battle. Councilman Greymore is pushing for war. Hopefully it won’t be long before he convinces the others.”

Robert groaned inwardly. He wanted is crew back and he wanted the laser out of Emperor Kavak’s hands, but he didn’t want war. “Perhaps I can find a way to contact the Kavakian Princes,” he suggested.

“What good would that do?” the admiral replied derisively.

“We saved their lives. Perhaps they would consider helping us get our people back.”

“Heh. They’re just children, and probably ungrateful ones at that. Besides, you don’t even have a way to contact them.”

True. Robert had no way to contact the boys without going through their father. And if I tried anyway, what would I say? ‘Hello Emperor. I don’t suppose I can talk to your children? I’d like to ask them to do something against your wishes, if that’s okay.’

Before the admiral could completely dismiss his suggestion, though, Robert thought of something. I have a contact on the Chevert Outpost. He may be able to help me, or at least know someone who can.”

“Is he reliable?”

All captains fostered connections throughout their territory. Some contacts more disreputable than others, and the ones specializing in information tended to be the most disreputable of all. “As reliably as any spy master,” Robert replied.

“Hmm,” the admiral replied with a thoughtful look. “You may contact this man, but not as a way to reach the princes. Get any intel you can on the Emperor’s military status and plans. I want to know everything that bastard is up to.”

“Yes, Vice Admiral. Such information may come at a price, though,” Robert said, referring to the monetary costs of paying for information and offering bribes.

“If the information you get is valuable, pay it. I’ll increase your commerce budget.”

Good, Robert thought. Perhaps I can find another way. Any price to avoid the high costs of war. “I’ll be on my way as soon as the Cronus and Poseidon arrive and as soon as my ship is repaired.”

Who was the man Jori had mentioned, the one who handles the Emperor’s foreign trade? Robert wondered. Jack? No Jax. That was it. Jax. I wonder if he might be of any help.


Note from the author: Sorry I missed a week. I was in the process of moving. I’m settled now, so it is time to get back on track with writing my story. If you like this novella so far, let me know. If you have any suggestions or notice any errors, please comment.

(This sci-fi saga is protected by copyright) Copyright September, 2015 by Dawn Ross

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The Kavakian Empire – Part Two Emperor Ch9a

Posted in Sci-Fi Part 2, The Kavakian Empire with tags , , , , , , , , on September 12, 2015 by Dawn Ross

The Kavakian Empire

A Space Opera by Dawn Ross

Part Two – The Emperor

Chapter 9a

(This is chapter 9a of part two. If you haven’t read part one of The Kavakian Empire novella yet, find it on the bar to the right. The first eight chapters of part two can also be found there.)

“I’m sure it goes here, my Lord,” Jako said, trying to sound polite. But Jori could sense his irritation.

“For the last time, Jako, it makes no sense. If you put it there, the laser will barely have enough power to destroy an escape pod, let alone an entire planet.”

They argue about it more until Jori finally sensed that Jako understood what he was saying. The man didn’t admit it, though. “Well, if that’s the way you want it then, Sir,” he said with a fake smile.

“It is,” Jori replied through gritted teeth. He felt like knocking that look right off his face. Jako was really trying not to sound condescending, but Jori could feel it. He hated it when people patronized him. He was a child. He couldn’t deny it. But he was highly intelligent and he knew it, a hell of a lot smarter than Jako for sure.

Jori hated Jako, but who didn’t. The man was a devious craven. No doubt if the laser didn’t work, he’d try to shift all the blame onto Jori. And of course, if the laser did work he’d take all the credit.

Fortunately, it didn’t seem likely the laser would ever get into working condition. Although Jako knew a great deal about how the device worked, he didn’t know as much as Jori. And there was still much that Jori didn’t understand.

The more he looked at the laser specifications, the more sense it made. If he really applied himself, he could probably get it to work. A part of him wanted to just for the sake of the challenge. But trying to think of a way to sabotage it without Jako figuring it out was a challenge in itself, a challenge he could be satisfied with.

“How are things going?” Terk asked as he stepped up beside Jori. Jako flinched. He probably didn’t hear or see Terk approach. Jori didn’t either, but he and his brother could sense one another no matter where they were on the ship. On planets, too, so long as the distance wasn’t too great.

Jako straightened into a military stance and took it upon himself to reply. “Well, my Lord. Except I don’t think these men, or whatever you call them, know what they’re doing.”

“They know,” Jori replied, trying not to sound defensive. “I think it is you who doesn’t know.”

Jako scowled and looked like he wanted to reply, but both brothers glowered at him. Terk didn’t like Jako either.

“Why don’t you go find something to do,” Terk told him.

Jako nodded politely but Jori could sense his indignation as he left.

“I told you this wouldn’t work,” Terk said quietly. He was referring to their ability to pass off the Alliance crew as having scientific knowledge of lasers.

“I’ll think of something to save them.”

Terk sighed in annoyance. “I’m not having this argument with you again.”

Jori replied with a pleading look.

Terk frowned in return. Both he and Terk had perfected an intimidating angry glare that worked on almost everyone. But Jori could sense Terk wasn’t at all upset. “Fine. If you come up with a good idea, I’ll think about it,” he relented.

Terk was tough. He could be harsh and unrelenting at times. But Jori knew he didn’t want these men to die any more than he did. The difference between them, though, was that Terk was willing to capitulate and Jori wasn’t.

Jori smiled slightly and felt hopeful.

“It had better be good, though,” Terk warned.

Jori nodded and his smile widened. “So what do you think we should do about Jako in the meantime?”

“I’ll try to make sure his suspicions don’t go beyond me,” Terk replied.

“That won’t be easy. Father comes here and asks him questions almost every single day.”

“I’ll try to think of something.”

“Thank you,” Jori said with sincerity.

“You’re a real pain in the ass, you know.” He spoke with mock anger. Jori smiled. Terk rolled his eyes and muttered, “Brat.”

Anyone who heard Terk would’ve thought he meant it. But Jori sensed the love his big brother had for him. And he felt the same in return.


So what do you think of this chapter? Constructive criticism is welcome.

(This sci-fi saga is protected by copyright) Copyright July, 2015 by Dawn Ross

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The Kavakian Empire – Part Two Emperor Ch8c

Posted in Sci-Fi Part 2, The Kavakian Empire with tags , , , , , , , , on September 5, 2015 by Dawn Ross

Ships from Star Wars

The Kavakian Empire

A Space Opera by Dawn Ross

Part Two – The Emperor

Chapter 8c

Note from the author: This is just a basic outline of what is going to happen in this part of the chapter. As stated previously, I do not always write out a chapter because of copyright issues and because I want to deter the pirate copying of my story. Another reason I did not write out this part yet is because I am in the process of moving. Hopefully, I’ve written ahead enough that you will still get to read part of this novella every Saturday until I get settled.

The Defender was engaged in a firefight with one of the Tredon ships when Robert got within communications distance. “It’s the Basilisk,” the Defender’s captain reported to Robert on the comm. “Lieutenant Fisker will fill you in.” Robert was not yet close enough to enter the firefight so as his ship approached, he got a full report from Fisker, the Defender’s communication officer. “We arrived in time to attempt to keep the Basilisk from crossing over into their territory.” Robert recognized that they were very close to the Tredon border. “Captain Richforth contacted him to demand the return of our people but they said the prisoners were onboard the emperor’s ship and the emperor’s ship had already crossed over. We tried to get more information but they closed communications and began firing.”

The Defender was losing the fight. Robert’s ship was not operating at full capacity yet, but he jumped in to help defend the Defender as soon as he was in range. Even though it was now two ships against one, the Alliance ships were not faring well.

Then the Basilisk hit the Defender with a crippling blow, which took them out of the fight. Robert was on the defense now. He knew he was dead. Systems were failing. His most effective weaponry was running low on energy.

Then another shot from the Basilisk put the Odyssey out of commission. The Odyssey was a sitting duck. The Basilisk could have taken advantage and completely destroyed both ships, but instead he took the opportunity to leave and cross over into Tredon territory.


So what do you think of this chapter? Constructive criticism is welcome.

(This sci-fi saga is protected by copyright) Copyright August, 2015 by Dawn Ross

You may share this sci-fi novella so long as you link back to this website and mention, The Kavakian Empire by Dawn Ross.